Delight read this and then fix sentence, grammar, etc. And tell me if it does make sense. If not, then delight fix it if possible. It’s for my magazine assignment.

“Microsoft Xbox 360 and Sony Playstation 3 have some advantages and disadvantages. Keep in mind, they are primarily related to games rather than entertainment and other services such as movies, composition, downloads, chats. We found that the Xbox 360 is really the best choice for buying a game console. If you ever wondering why, we’ll find it out in the following:

GAMES/MOVIES
PS3 have some brilliant exclusively games such as Metal Gear Solid 4, of course. But Xbox 360 has a large number of fantastic games (approximately 90 games are over 80% rating, compares to PS3 has approximately 45). The PS3 versions will be ports of the Xbox 360 versions. (The opposite was right for Xbox vs. PS2).
PS3 has Blu-Ray inbuilt – you can watch full high-classification movies and it is the cheapest blu-ray player in market. Blu-ray can be store up to 50GB, compares to Xbox 360’s dual-layer DVD is only 8.5 GB, in which game developers are able to develop loads of missions, characters, cut-scenes, etc with the blu-ray disc. But, at the moment, most games can be fitting on a dual-layer DVD disc, plus Microsoft produced a special software that able to reduce file size in same game quality (for example; Grand Theft Auto 4).

ONLINE SERVICE
A slam dunk for Microsoft. The Xbox Live is austerely brilliant for online service gaming, because it has loads of fantastic features; an example of one feature – when you download a large file size on Playstation 3, then you will be stuck, you can’t do anything else while actively downloading. Unlike Xbox 360 – you can play a game, watch a movie, and listen to composition or whatever you want during downloading in the background. You can even turn off your console, it goes into a low power mode in anticipation of downloads are complete, then completely shuts down. But, if you want to play online multiplayer with Xbox Live, you then must pay a fee, compares to Playstation Network is free. But one year Gold membership costs only .95, it is not terrible. Also Xbox Live has a fantastic support for users; for example, PS3 is a free subscription – sometimes it can cause the internet in distress. You pay subscription for Xbox Live; they will help you solving the problem.

PERFORMANCE
On paper, the PS3 is more powerful. In reality, it’s reasonably inferior to the Xbox 360, thanks to it has triple PowerPC Xenon cores, compares to PS3 has only one Cell processor core with seven Synergistic Processing Units. The Xbox 360 has are far simpler to take advantage of than the SPUs on the PS3, because it is better development tools, better documentation, and simpler architecture. That is the primarily reason game developers are hardly to develop a game for PS3 version, unless they have fully knowledge of the PS3’s development tools required.

VISUAL QUALITY
The Xbox 360’s graphic card design is more flexible and it has more processing power than the PS3’s graphic card, thanks to ATI’s unified shader architecture and it contains 10MB of embedded DRAM. Half of games on Xbox 360 have better size resolution than PS3 does (for example, Grand Theft Auto IV’s native resolution is 720p on Xbox 360 version, compares to PS3 is 640p).

OVERALL
The Xbox 360 is easily won this round: after all, it’s hard to turn down buying a killer blu-ray player and gaming combo for 0 when blu-ray players alone run well further than that, and it has some brilliant exclusively games and free online service. So why did Xbox 360 win? Because it has a fantastic range of game selection, brilliant online service supports, ultimately performance and gorgeous visual quality.”
I will give you 10 points (best answer) if you fix it. Thanks!
Ok listen up. Im not excellent in English but I’m studying in Graphic Design (I’m really excellent at designing). So my assignment is questioned to be designed a magazine. This random paragraph will place in the pretend game magazine.

Best answer:

Answer by ashley b
You’re going to use killer as an adjective in your homework?
I’d say you have some serious rewording to do.

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